This is my draft letter I'm planning to send to agents later this year for my novel. If you have any suggestions to improve it or found anything hard to understand, feel free to tell me - I'd appreciate your feedback.
Dear (agent’s name)
DIRTY DRESS is historical fantasy complete at 90,000 words, with inspirations from Wilbur Smith’s River God and Anita Diamant’s The Red Tent.
Lilith is high priestess of the Temple of Inanna in the world’s greatest city, where women have tyrannised men for eons.
Even men’s role in procreation isn’t publicly acknowledged - it’s believed women create babies like a tree bears fruit. The Temple hides the truth as part of an agenda to keep men down and avoid prophecies of a male-ruled era becoming reality.
Roving gem miner Adam forges a sparky relationship with Lilith and convinces her there’s a threat from male rebels from northern Mesopotamia who reject the Goddess Inanna and her priestesses. He gets what he wants - to build the world’s first army to protect the city, giving him more power than any man has known, especially after he manipulates Lilith into marrying him.
The rebel threat seemingly intensifies alongside their capricious relationship.
Lilith’s wise conscience recognises the poor treatment of males and wants to create a fairer future, but she fears what could happen if she gives them more privilege. The choice is taken from her when Adam leads a coup of the Temple, revealing his betrayal and ambition know no bounds.
The story is told by Lilith, who in Jewish folklore was married to Adam before Eve, dumping him when he insisted he was above her. Her refusal to submit saw her demonised through the ages, her story unheard.
As a qualified astrologer, I’ve set the novel 6,000 years ago at a point in an astronomical cycle when some believe a pendulum swung from a matriarchal to a patriarchal era – each as bad as the other – which is followed by a re-unification beginning in our modern day, as suggested by the current groundswell of equality.
This is a stand-alone work with potential for a connected novel set 12,000 years ago, which between giving astrology consultations and editing a business publication, I’m now plotting.
Thank you for your consideration.